Character Chart
Character’s full name: Melody Rose Harper

Reason or meaning of name: Her mother loved the name Melody and It went well with the last name “Harper” Also it was Melody’s late grandmothers middle name.

Character’s nickname: Elody

Reason for nickname: Her best friends began to call her…
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Character Chart
Character’s full name: Melody Rose Harper

Reason or meaning of name: Her mother loved the name Melody and It went well with the last name “Harper” Also it was Melody’s late grandmothers middle name.

Character’s nickname: Elody

Reason for nickname: Her best friends began to call her that at the age of six and it carried out through out her life

Birth date:

Physical appearance
Age: 17
How old does he/she appear: 17
Weight: 115
Height: 5’4
Body build: thin, barely any boobs what so ever.
Shape of face: heart
Eye color: Dark bluefish green
Glasses or contacts: None
Skin tone: Pale
Distinguishing marks: Length scar from her neck to her hip. Large, faint heart shaped beauty mark on her lower back.

Predominant features: The part of the scar that shows on her neck. Her eyes.

Hair color: Used to be dark auburn brown but when she died it morphed naturally into pale, pale blonde.
Type of hair: Thick, Long (right above her elbows) wavy.
Hairstyle: None really, she has old bangs that grew out and now look as if she had tried to give layers to her hair by herself.
Voice: soft and medium tone
Overall attractiveness: She’s pretty, but in another world ghostly way.
Physical disabilities: can skin analyzer machine sambarely hear out of her left ear due to trauma to the head as a child.

Usual fashion of dress: She is usually floating about in a white quarter sleeved, calf length gown. When she was alive her dress usually consisted of dark ripped jeans and unique tee shirts that you would find in vintage shops.
Favorite outfit: Dark, ripped skin tight jeans and a creamy off white shirt with the word ‘Love’ written in a black, slanted font. Most likely she cut one of the shoulders off to make it more edgy.
Jewelry or accessories:

Personality
Good personality traits: She’s humble, self expressive, kind, and loving of the people she cares about. She is protective, sometimes over protective. She loves life (until she dies..)

Bad personality traits: She’s stubborn, opinionated, sarcastic, and some times a little crazy. If you slam her she is going to slam back ten times harder. She’s not afraid to fight: Verbal or Physical.

Mood character is most often in: Pretty chill, unless she is in a really good mood or a really bad one, But she is also very intense and serious if the situation calls for it.

Sense of humor: Her sense of humor is sarcastic but if your around her for more than ten minutes, your going to be laughing.

Character’s greatest joy in life: Well, her soul mate, Seth really brings joy to her. Her family and her friends also.

Character’s greatest fear:

She doesn’t really fear much, or at least she doesn’t think about it. If she comes up against something that’s scary to her, she’ll admit it. I think her biggest fear would be loosing the people that she loves
Why?
Because they are all she has, she cares so deeply for them that she would risk her own life, or even sacrifice it to save one or all of them.
What single event would most throw this character’s life into complete turmoil? If Seth or a close family member died (mom, dad, Brother, sister, Best friends..)
Character is most at ease when: She is with Her friends, Seth, or by herself.
Most ill at ease when: She is around people that tick her off just by existing.
Enraged when: Somebody threatens to hurt her or someone she loves in any sort of way.
Depressed or sad when: She and Seth get into stupid little arguments.
Priorities: Before death: Finishing school. After death: Getting back.
Life philosophy: You don’t have forever to be alive, live while you can. You have forever to be dead.
If granted one wish, it would be: to go back to earth and be alive again.
Why? Because everything she ever loved is there
Character’s soft spot: Her soft spot would be love.
Is this soft spot obvious to others? Kind of, I mean, she’s really guarded when it comes to strangers so unless you were stalking her or something it might be obvious.
Greatest strength: She’s really strong, emotionally.
Greatest vulnerability or weakness: She’s quick to respond in anger. You tick her off, you wont last long.

Answer:
Maikang I do think that Bella is a Mary Sue. She barely has a personality. And although clumsiness is not a flaw, it doesn’t mean that you’re a ‘damsel in distress’. It just means that you’re naturally clumsy. (coming from a girl who is naturally clumsy) Aislinn isn’t as bad as a Mary Sue as some of the other characters you mentioned, but yes, she is a Mary Sue. Clary from the Mortal Instruments series is somewhat of a Mary Sue. I don’t remember off the top of my head of any flaws that she had.skin analyzer

Maikang Well so far, she seems to be a pretty unique character. It’s good you have an image of her worked out, but it’s good to focus on the more important details like her history and how she died. I don’t know if you have her history planned out, but this seems to be a pretty interesting ghost. Though, I think it’d be best to give her a better strength since that is quite common, but since it can relate to the reader, it could be good. But her weakness will kind of clash with her strength, unless you can try to explain why she can be emotionally strong and rash? But for now, she doesn’t seem to be a Mary Sue.skin analyzer

Maikang I’m assuming you want some kind of feedback about wether the characters any good or not. Sounds like it will be. I wouldn’t put being opinionated in the bad category though. Good character development is important, but great characters suffer without a good story. Even bad characters can be carried through with a good story. So now you’ve got the details worked out tis time to develop the actual story, because without on, she’s still just a bunch of adjectives.skin analyzer

Maikang You had some pieces of information that weren’t really necessary, like voice and style of clothing. Unless of course you were planning to have her wear the same thing the whole time. You also threw me off when you mentioned the fact that she was dead. That’s important info that you should’ve mentioned earlier. But other than that, she sounds like an interesting ghost case! Something you’d find in a good mystery tale. I like it! Although I am still wondering why out of all that information, you failed to talk about how she died!skin analyzer

Maikang I read through and you seem to have a thoroughly interesting character. My only suggestion is to make her stand out a little better. Her greatest strength & greatest fear are a little too generic. I think loosing people you love is very scary for anyone. Think a bit outside of the general realm.

That’s my only complaint. Good luck with your story! 🙂skin analyzer

Maikang Unfortunately character analyzer tell me nothing about whether the character is a Mary Sue or not. I can write all these wonderful things about my character, but what it really boils down to is how they interact with other characters and how they develope as a character throughout the book.skin analyzer

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